WHY..do many Yahoo-ites seem to believe intelligence is based on good spelling and grammar?

I'm not sure exactly what's up with your first sentence, but it does sound odd the way it's written. With the second sentence, since you have 2 independent clauses you either needed a semicolon or a conjugating conjunction (and). For the third sentence, you only needed a comma because you did not have a second independent clause.

The part of the sentence after the semicolon is an appositive. Again with the fourth sentence you misused a semicolon (you only needed a comma). The first part of the sentence was only a phrase, not an independent clause.

Also, in my opinion you need "and" after "said,". In the fifth sentence, I would personally replace the semicolon with a colon, because you are redefining suspicions as "an invitation." But you could just separate it into two sentences.

If it were me I would also remove the comma after "up" because you do not need commas in a compound predicate that only has two parts. Hope that helped! Sorry for writing a book.

She has a personal hatred for Semicolons...lol...Maybe try just ending your sentences where the semicolons are and start a new one the word after that. Edit..Wow that changes things and makes it harder..maybe just ask her what you did wrong. Lol.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.