Would this be an effective way to start a novel? And then go into a flashback?

Great! But why don't you have it starting from he undead life and she like...forgets and keeps remembering that night a few seconds at a time till the end? Then the entire story would be different and a bit more...layered if you know what I mean Or you found do the whole undead life and have the flashback right at the very end as the final chapter or something?

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I really don't feel her fear, sorry, but I should be feeling her fear.

It was to long for my attention span but start at the end then go to the beginning like in the hangover :D.

A bit long winded and kind of all over the place, but it's a start! Sounds interesting though!

This was long & interesting.. I'm not sure how it's going to look with the flashback but this was good.

It was all right, I guess better than some of the stories I read on here. But how would she have a flashback if she's dead? And you made some grammatical errors and stuff.

For example- I closed my eyes praying for help, but I knew no one can or would help me. Wouldn't it be I closed my eyes praying for help, but I knew no one could or would help me. Or I closed my eyes praying for help, but I know no one can or would will help me.

You can't have a past tense verb (knew), then a present tense verb (can) and then another past tense verb (would).

Ant the survey saaaaiiiiiis...no, I didn't even read anything beyond the title because flashbacks are cliche, tacky and way overused. Good way to end a story before it's even started.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.