Another piece of free verse for comment or critique if you will?

When that box opens,no dancing ballerina pirouettes to heavenly tune" Your poem and that line in particular,evokes for me and probably many other people an incredibly sad and painful event in our different pasts. Many a night I have lain awake and unwillingly allowed that box to open. Only experiences of great sadness can produce poems of such poignancy.

Wow! I'm impressed! This is really beautiful.

You've employed potent words, your lines sing, your pacing reflects the overall tone of the poem. The only thing I might suggest (and this with great hesitation) is that you might be able to emphasize your meaning a little better if you added a few more poignant line breaks. You've got good words.

I think I could appreciate them a little better if they were framed with more thought. Just an idea. Great work!

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.