BITCHES BREW...got poem going to share, read & comment as you dare -poem from the voice of a witch/wizard?

Excellent work. The brevity and tone enhance this provocative metaphor. The second paragraph hit neatly and unexpectedly.

I find myself going back and forth from the nail itself to the structures a nail holds up. I apply the same thoughts to loss by suicide. Each word, space, and piece of punctuation is important in this form.

You use commas where period stops, dashes or colons might be preferable. I assume you are going for a stream-of-consciousness effect, but more formal punctuation might better suit the straight-forward style. I kind of prefer the flow of you couldn't know she couldn't live but that's minor.

What does throw me is the word "effortlessly." Your meaning is that it appears effortless despite the stress on the nail. I think you could find a better word.

These suggestions are no more than asking Mozart whether he thinks he needs the extra note in the fifth measure. This is a poem and an idea I keep coming back to. Very well done.

As to the second stanza wouldn't it have been better to perhaps break into two (no pun intended), and build up her strength and how relating to the nail symbolism she held the family, etc. together. The last stanza could easily be built around the first, echoing its thoughts. You can build this poem more, perhaps you need a few more nails?

(pun intended!).

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.