How many of you read The Kite Runner?

1P: " the novel" (2nd time) not necessary. 'In Kite Rider' should be fine/ "Khaled uses the character, Amir" Shorten to 'Khaled uses Amir'/ "which creates guilt within oneself, and ultimate destroying relationships" find a different word than oneself 2P: If called, literally, the Kite Fighting Tournament, then cap 'Fighting'/ I wouldn't put the comma after "and Hassan"/ "Hassan is gone long enough to alarm Amir, who begins to search for him and once he finds him, he sees Assef, a bully, raping him" He/Him/Her/She are good for the last name you mention only. Try to use more names change to so the doesn't sound like, she hit her and she fought back... ' who begins to search for him and once Amir does..." so "For Him" is not so repetitive/ Comma before "but later convinces"/ punctuation was forgotten after (Amir's Father)/ "Amir uses Hassan as a tool" comma after "tool"/ " Hassan’s friendship for Amir is not worth more than the blue kite, which ultimately shows Amir betraying and using Hassan for his own need" a normal kite?

Blue kite is not actually a kite and is a name for something? If just a normal kite, leave alone, if special then cap 'Blue Kite'... Do not understand everything after, Which Ultimately shows,...think of another way to prove point. 'Which ... shows Amir's betrayal and use for his own?' 'Which ... shows Amir WAS .....own'........ You do not mention the "blue kite" in the quote, so I do not know what it is.

3P "He starts hating Hassan" is used 3 times. Replace 2 and 3 with ' as his Rage, Anger for Hassan builds'/ "For Amir it is a torture to see Hassan because he knows what he did was wrong " he him-Amir Hassan... '...... to see him because Amir knows what he did...'/ "Also this is the turning point for both Amir and Hassan because Amir stand Hassan and starts to plot against him." Did you leave a word out?

'a turning point for the two because Amir (can't stand?) Hassan...' 4P "In the end, Amir plots against Hassan, which is the turning point for Amir, Hassan, Baba and Hassan’s father, Ali. " used Turning Point in sentence above... / "Amir puts his watch given to him by his father, Baba, under Hassan’s mattress and accuses him of stealing it." already mentioned who Baba was before, not needed again" 'Amir....watch, given by Baba,..." / "Hassan being a good friend agrees that he stole the watch and takes the blame" comma after Hassan. / "Ali quits for" don't need the first For/ "because Baba grew up with Ali" I'd get rid of quotations... marks or not, you could not tell it was in the story.

/ "All their friendship is destroyed" Aren't there 2 relationships? 'All their friendshipS ARE'/ "This breaks the bond between both friendships" might wanna replace Friendships with 'Relationships', so its not repetitive. 5P (end first sentence) "and also their both fathers" switch around.

Simple mistake/ "and end up betraying him" add 'S' after End/ "This betrayal for Amir"? For Amir or Hassan? 'Betrayal OF Amir'/ "which creates darkness in their family" comma before Which/ Last sentence not entirely wrong, but the point could be made into 2,3 sentences.

Might want to split so there aren't many Subordinating Conjunctions. Maybe leave out "as he cannot stand looking at him".....:"Which creates darkness in their family" they are friends, so familIES.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.