Should I give this girl I like this poem I wrote her for Christmas (Honesty needed PLEASEE)?

Aww you sound like a sweet guy. I think she would love it. :).

I would wait until you're dating her and you know that she isn't going to laugh at you. It's not a bad poem though.

Awwww I think it will be romantic... :) most guys won't do that at all but note I think it will sound better it you put "your eyes are brown like sweet chocolate" I think your should also re-range somethings too make it better..

Im pretty sure is already sent and not that bad. You explain your feelings right directly without much worries on rhythm, metrics nor rhyme. She will find your a freestyler out of this text, slightly direct by the lack of actual literary rules.

I find the last verse not too original but still a nice make up for this homming missile to her heart. All the best.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.