Would anyone care to critique my "managed page" on the community orchestra that I play in?

Looks really good. I think you could add a news section perhaps, or a section on upcoming events maybe. Also you can inlink dates in your text sections and perhaps Oahu.

Great video and picture sections too! Good job on a topic your obviously know a lot about.

Wow, looks very nice and organized, and you are definitely an expert on the topic. I like the featured picture you added. I also like how you arranged the related pages.

This will be an nice accompaniment to the official website.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.