Care to read my poem, comments or critique welcome, thanks?

The images set in this poem to me suggest a "Gonzo" poetry style akin if Hunter S Thompson wrote children's stories,very interesting work.

Work on your meter, most lines seems like 10. Get rid of the acronyms... how do you expect the reader to pronounce? Just say Jet Blue or Delta.

End rhymes should be natural. When you have to resort to arcane words to make rhymes, that seems forced to me especially when it doesn't appear to be your natural voice: "comestible" for example. As to flow, speak the words aloud as you write.

You have some easy, flowing lines and then you jump into a disjointed style: "Mia tackles prehistoric absconds with flesh" for example. Maybe you should write the story in prose, without the restraints of meter and rhyme. Once you done that then work on making it into a poem.

Just a thought. What you have here seems to be an interesting start to a tall "dragon" tale!

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.