Poem I wrote honest opinions.?

Just fabulous. I think as a word of advice or constuctive criticism, choose either free verse, like the first stanza or rhyme. You were on very solid ground with the free verse.

Thanks for sharing. --M_+).

Please note that you asked for Honest Opinion. 1st stanza, Line 2, : "since" > "sense". Line 2: do you mean "surreal" or "so real"?

2nd stanza, Line 4: "You're" > "your". As to rhyming, check "surreal" and "feel". Some are obviously forced rhyme.

"and good people are nice" is quite redundant. "collide" needs at least tow elements, and its meaning doesn't fit here, anyway. All in all, make a revision, because it seems like a poem that has been translated to English.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.