Honest poem criticism, please? HoNeSt?

Gossip Girl First of all, I would not have read from beginning to end, slowly, if this poem did not captivate me at any level, and it did, so the answer to your first question, "Is this a good poem?" An unmitigated YES. You mentioned possible spelling mistakes.

I realize this is not the end of the world, no big deal type of stuff, but remember, this poem is yours, and is also for us to read and enjoy. If you can use the spell check and make it work, I would do it. Just a thought.

Those kind of things often determine whether someone will be back to view one of your poems. It may seem trite, but they have that right, and because of that, it is important if one wants to be a good poet. I often don't like repetition, but your L1 to each stanza was 'choice' and a good call.

Format wise I like the stanza's but would be consistent with 4 line ones, and you are good enough where I would tighten the longer sentences and consider a rhyme scheme------just my opinion to make this good to excellent. However, with such short sentences you really made free verse work this time, a testimony to your talent. My favorite line, is really something, is actually the last two, but holy unbelievable "she screams in delight" -- wow, this is great.

Just powerful stuff, outrageously good ending. Congrats to you. Edit: If you want tell me where the other poem is and I will respond again, you deserve a lot of credit for this.

Its good.....buuuut lol you make it sound as if shes growing up, try and add a little bit more storyline this poem has potential now just expand it, also as to waht shes looking at we have no ideaXD the glistening stuff is well.....it could be anything......bring this poem to life I want to experience waht this girls going thru not just the confusin, dissapointment and delight, I want to join her feelings and see what she see's, and know why shes feeling that way.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.