Honest Opinions please of what you think about this poem I wrote so far..?

Interesting theory. But im sorry it sux. It doesn't get its point across.

Its all over the place. Its just saying random metaphors. ::::::ADVICE TIME::::::: think about peoples life experiences think about what tugs at their heart strings.

You'll get it. It just takes some time. Find what touches you and use that as your muse <3 :).

At first I wanted 2 say it shouldve been a different title but then wen you wrote that lil message at the bottom it all made sense so you did awesome.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.