POEM ~ What are your opinions? (Rough draft) =)?

Enigma indeed, I've always thought we were created so mother nature may look at herself. One minute a very beautiful sunny peaceful day, the next a raging storm which destroys everything in its path. You have captured the human spirit and put it on display.

We are both the worker bee and the queen in constant search for honey. As for the technical merits of your poem I have not the skill to say. Enjoyed the poem it was on point without being preachy.

I will have to look up bodhisattva.

If I am reading this right, quite a sonnet sequence. The voltas? 'The seed of godliness grows in your breast' 'Up on his throne, a paragon of greed' 'This thing, that loves and hates with facile grace' Yes, your ending couplet says it all.

We carry both good and evil within and in battle with each other. Our enigma for sure. As to improving the poem....how about a condensed version in five lines?

Lol A strong read, my compliments.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.