Wat do you guys think of my song, pleaz be hard critics n tell me where I can improve?

My grandmothers girlfriend Bukhlava she has hot dog pack on back of neck. As the uneducated african american would say "she has chins for days" She has armpit hair the rolls out like the red carpet when she lifts arm her gut so big it look as if she swallow baby goat...'s whole family she is missing one eye so me and my cousin hezbula put handball in eye and took sharpie and put dot in middle. Her rist has thick layer of crusty rash so she cant cut herself don't vorry pretty ladie you no look bad, I would make you one of my 15 wives you must believe youself because beholder is like the beauty's eye one man trash is another man treasure unfotunatly Bukhlava is hot kuwatian garbage all year long.

Think of all the things in the world to be seen and done... think about everything your body does for you every day and be thankful that you're healthy you have legs and arms (i'm assuming) when the guy in the boston bombing lost his you don't have a terminal disease (i'm assuming) you can plan a future your skin protects your body, your eyes see, your nose smells, you lips let you talk and eat... society puts too much importance on beauty when really how you live your life shouldn't revolve around it not going to feed you that "everyone is beautiful" bullshit because not everyone is but you are a miracle and you have a miraculous life and you shouldn't throw that away on something so trivial and petty as being "ok" looking be thankful.

I cant really gove you an answer,but what I can give you is a way to a solution, that is you have to find the anglde that you relate to or peaks your interest. A good paper is one that people get drawn into because it reaches them ln some way.As for me WW11 to me, I think of the holocaust and the effect it had on the survivors, their families and those who stood by and did nothing until it was too late.